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Zelda Legends - Village Square - Fan Fiction

Fan Fiction


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Epona's Dream

By zeldaslove
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Chapter 1: The Transformation

"See you tommorrow Epona." Link says petting his horse and walking away. Epona whines as her master leaves. "Shhh girl,it's okay." Link says.

In the middle of the night a thump sounds on the roof of Epona's stable. "What was that?" she thought to herself. Just then Naru,Din,and Farore appear in front of Epona. " Do not fear us, we have come to help Link. A great battle approaches and Link needs help." Din says.
"What good does a horse serve against the evil magic of Ganondorf?" Naru says.
"That is why we have come to transform you. We shall make you human,and as human you shall weild the Staff of Wisdom. In it contains all our magic. Use it to protect Link." Farore says.
The ladies zap Epona and she becomes a human.
"W-what am I? Human? Human! I'm HUMAN!" Epona shouts.

"What the-?" Link says waking up hearing a shout. "Stupid neighbors." Link says and lays down.

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Comments on this chapter

Koroks Rock says:

Okey dokey. First you need to read this page, concerning line spacing and such.

Second off, this page is really, really short. Way too short for an intro, really. Add detail, such as how Link left: did he walk out the front gate, did he vault over the fence, was he tired? What was the night like, was it rainy or clear, were the bats out or was it too windy? What do the goddesses look like, and how do their voices sound? Most importantly, talk about how Epona is transformed. Is it painful like in Majora's Mask, or is it a more elegant process.

Third- beware the present tense. "says" is in the present tense, which means its as if it's happening right now. A story will sound a lot better and be easier to write if you use the past tense, via words life "said". "Epona whined as her mast left." is a slightly stronger sentence.

linkdragon says:

It was short but it was ok. try not to capitalize all your letters in a sentence just the first or a proper noun. Oh and you spelled Nayru wrong. just telling you otherwise it was great!

Dark Dragon says:

I have to agree with KR; it is too short. And more detail. I was trying to figure out where the stable came from. Other than that, I'd say it's a great idea for a story.

linksdaughter says:

i like it . its really simple and easy to read.

shieklord says:

I have a great idea that will help. Do you have a favorite book? (Chronicles of Nainia, Lord of the rings, for example) read the story and pay attention to how the writer tells the story, how he develops the characters, describes places, and most importantly, how he punctuates. Dont write exactly like them though, that is going to be too plain if you try to imitate them exactly. But you can lern a lot of useful things from them.

Link_Rules_All says:

what shieklord and KR said.

starfgh/zelda says:

Write the next chapter! PLEASE!!!!!!